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Lunafur’s Journey

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Lunapaw is training to become a warrior alongside her brother Egan she gets a dream from starclan that tells her that she must go on a perilous journey to save the clans

“Right let’s see you fighting” Lunapaw was so exited because this was the last bit of her warrior assessment and she was going to be made a warrior with her brother Rustypaw, who’s assessment was going well and it was time to show their mentors just how well they could fight! Lunapaw and Rustypaw circles each other then Rustypaw lunged towards Lunapaw and she twisted, sliding under her brother and pushing up against his underbelly as he landed! Her adrenaline was pumping now and she pounced on Rustypaw as he tried to get up then he grabbed her shoulders and rolled her underneath him! “Stop that’s enough you have passed your final assessment and your warrior ceremony will be at dawn tomorrow” Yowled Lunapaw’s mentor Strongclaw

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61 days ago
136 days ago
I like it!
Great wording but just an observation you may want to make the sentences shorter and use periods instead of exclamation marks. Remember, sentences are one subject.